Loranys Gellantara

I like it except I think that you shouldn't have some lines short and other very long. It would not only sound but look better. For example: "To every heart ...

First thing I liked it! Secondly I think that you can change some of the lines. For example: I feel like my individuality is being swallowed whole and leaving me ...

For a first poem this isn't bad. I think that it can be edited. For example: 'Buds then leaves are on your limbs' AND 'all falls off and you turn ...

I like it! Very constructive and you put a lot of feeling into it. How I think you could have cut these two verses. I hate my life I hate ...

This needs a bit of editing. To you, Should have a full stop not a comma. The second line should be, "be able to say the truth on day", cut ...

I can't remember if I ever posted on here but guess which one I think is best!!! You guessed it! Harry Potter by far. Mmmm... If Tom Felton was on ...

Pale Skin, Did you mean to put this on the same line because it doesn't go how you have it? Another thing is you should try to keep all the ...

Just because it's a negative emotion doesn't make it a bad poem. I agree. A lot of my poems are negative and they're still good (most of them). But I ...